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« Reply #30 on: April 05, 2004, 12:51:05 pm » |
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Spirit of the Sky
And the light was liquid, filling the open sky.
Spirit of the Woods
And the sky was life, quenching the thirsty woods.
Spirit of the Flames
And the woods were kindling, feeding the sunset's flames.
Spirit of the Darkness
And the flames were candles, doused in the night's darkness.
Spirit of the Light
And the darkness was gone, fading to dawn's light.
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« Reply #31 on: April 05, 2004, 04:01:55 pm » |
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The "thirsty woods" one is a little off, but otherwise those are fucking amazing. Great first post.
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« Reply #32 on: April 05, 2004, 04:32:52 pm » |
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Those are fucking amazing. Great first post. I agree completely. Welcome to the site! |
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« Reply #33 on: April 06, 2004, 02:55:41 am » |
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Thanks.  Yeah, I had trouble with the green one. (and the red one, though I'm fairly happy with it now.) |
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« Reply #34 on: April 06, 2004, 09:58:04 am » |
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changes made
24 hour clock
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« Reply #35 on: April 06, 2004, 02:21:34 pm » |
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Hmm. My only other suggestion is that you change their names a little. I mean, Magic already has a Sky Spirit, Flame Spirit, Spirit of the Night, etc, so these seem a bit too familiar.
Given their mechanic of pumping up all creatures of a colour, it seems appropriate to make them preachers, leaders, banner bearers or something like that.
How about Monarch/Patriarch/Missionary of the Light/Flames etc?
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« Reply #36 on: April 06, 2004, 03:08:11 pm » |
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Monarch would be very flavorful.
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« Reply #37 on: April 07, 2004, 09:44:29 am » |
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Monarch it is then!
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« Reply #38 on: April 15, 2004, 12:35:36 pm » |
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"Monarch of the Darkness" sounds really bad.
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« Reply #39 on: April 15, 2004, 01:05:47 pm » |
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any better suggestions that still fit w/ the flavor text cycle?
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« Reply #40 on: April 15, 2004, 01:22:37 pm » |
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Perhaps "essence"?
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« Reply #41 on: April 16, 2004, 04:42:09 pm » |
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Closed and added.[/color]
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