Ode to Rift Bolt

[suneloon]

Sweet sweet Rift Bolt; where were you all my life?

Where were you all those cold dark tourneys?

All those times it was gg to a Chalice for one, or a well timed Daze?

All those times your bated fangs would have saved me from the stompy hordes?

All those times I was beaten to a pulp with no-sticks?

But no more - now you are forever with me!

You are indeed the rightful heir to the Bolt throne; and what you lack in lightning-speed, you make up for, so many-many times, with your cunning and castability. May your reign be as eternal as your illustrious ancestors!

Rift bolt: I give my life to you

[Bram]

The meter is horrible. You definitely should have used a iambic pentameter for this.

On the up side: nice volta in the last three lines (though the very last line is overly dramatic). Also, good use of stylistic devices such as the assonance in "bOlt thrOne". Additionally, I enjoyed the alliteration "Lack in Lighting-speed" and "Cunning and Castability".

All in all, I give it a 4 out of 10.

[LotusHead]

The meter is horrible. You definitely should have used a iambic pentameter for this.

On the up side: nice volta in the last three lines (though the very last line is overly dramatic). Also, good use of stylistic devices such as the assonance in "bOlt thrOne". Additionally, I enjoyed the alliteration "Lack in Lighting-speed" and "Cunning and Castability".

All in all, I give it a 4 out of 10.

I thought the poem was a good metaphor for whatever the poem was about!

Mesmeric Orbs.  Now there's a topic!